Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.
Twoku: Stump in clearing lit / by light it never gave leave / to pass its branches.
Honestly, I love this second version – the “twoku” for this one – which is actually the last of five versions I wrote…but it’s a little convoluted in the language/meaning – what do you think?
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Like second one better too. “Stump in clearing light” excellent image– playing with dark/light is tricky.
I appreciate that…the stump seemed so forlorn, dazed in the clearing it made by dying…