haikumages

Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.

Twoku: Stump in clearing lit / by light it never gave leave / to pass its branches.

Honestly, I love this second version – the “twoku” for this one – which is actually the last of five versions I wrote…but it’s a little convoluted in the language/meaning – what do you think?

This entry was published on 2012/07/27 at 11:11 am. It’s filed under Environment, Feelings, Haiku, Life+Wisdom, Nature, Summer and tagged , , , , , , , , , , , , , , . Bookmark the permalink. Follow any comments here with the RSS feed for this post.

2 thoughts on “Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.

  1. Like second one better too. “Stump in clearing light” excellent image– playing with dark/light is tricky.

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