Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.

Twoku: Stump in clearing lit / by light it never gave leave / to pass its branches.

Honestly, I love this second version – the “twoku” for this one – which is actually the last of five versions I wrote…but it’s a little convoluted in the language/meaning – what do you think?

27 Jul This entry was published on 2012/07/27 at 11:11 am. It’s filed under Environment, Feelings, Haiku, Life+Wisdom, Nature, Summer and tagged absence, branches, broken, clearing, cut down, fallen, gone, Haiku, haikugrams, haikumages, leaves, light, nature, stump, tree. Bookmark the permalink. Follow any comments here with the RSS feed for this post.

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2 thoughts on “Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.”

carolee1945 on 2012/07/30 at 6:30 pm said:

Like second one better too. “Stump in clearing light” excellent image– playing with dark/light is tricky.

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- remurray on 2012/08/05 at 3:30 pm said:
  
  I appreciate that…the stump seemed so forlorn, dazed in the clearing it made by dying…
  
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