Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.

Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.

7/27/2012

Twoku:
Stump in clearing lit / by light it never gave leave / to pass its branches.

I really like this second version (the “twoku”) which is actually the last of five versions I wrote. But it’s a little convoluted in the language/meaning… What do you think?

// haikumages // ©russ murray

“Haikumages” are short poems (mostly haiku and senryu-style) combined with images (mostly original photographs and graphics) by Russ Murray.

2 responses to “Stump sits in clearing / lit by light never allowed / when it had branches.”

carolee1945

7/30/2012

Like second one better too. “Stump in clearing light” excellent image– playing with dark/light is tricky.

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1. remurray
  
  8/5/2012
  
  I appreciate that…the stump seemed so forlorn, dazed in the clearing it made by dying…
  
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