This is a 3-5-3 syllable remake of my original 5-7-5 haiku:

Haiku jester throws / random pebble in water / revels in ripples.

I’ve been writing 3-5-3 ‘ku’s and ‘ru’s as a brain exercise lately, and although some look a little sparse, it has forced me to focus on the essence of the thought-image, message or feeling I want to convey.  I kinda like it!  3-5-3 is more hints and clues, rather than full details — a simpler wording, which is more interpretive for the reader.

The funny thing is that when I go back to 5-7-5 syllables, I feel verbose!  It feels like overabundance, a luxury of words, an embarrassment of riches.  It’s like giving a messy person a larger room to live in — you know they’ll fill up the extra space with more stuff — but will it be good stuff or just more mess?  3-5-3 has been a good discipline for me…

Which do you like better?  Don’t worry, I don’t think I’ll abandon 5-7-5 completely, but I’m enjoying writing a little sparser and simpler, syllable-wise… In any case, please enjoy, and comment!

Note: This is actually a Senryū poem, not a Haiku… You can read more about the two forms on my About page…